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Oh dear on a slight role atm railway childrens rhyme


Sylvian Tennant

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Black 5

Black 5

have you any coal

yes sir

yes sir

9 tons full

one for the passengers

one for the freight

and one for Holbeck shed

where I stay

 

This was thanks to me parnter who kindly started the ball rolling :P

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Last line needs (Black??) 5 syllables to scan like the original Rhyme.

I suggest you add "at night" to complete the line.???

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Hmmm good point, I'm going to take another look at it, there's a couple of things I'm not too happy with in it. For instance a friend did the calculations and although my coal capacity is absolutly correct, there should only be three tons to complete the rhyme.

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